Okay, I played it last night. While it was well done from a technical standpoint, it was a lacking in many other areas. Short summary below:
Positives: Excellent background; excellent use of custom PCX effects; excellent knowledge of various FRED features (briefing, messaging, beams, sexps, directives, goals, etc.)
Negatives: No story to speak of; short messages that only tell you what is happening and nothing more; crazy balance (Ares fighters + Kaysers and Trebuchets with no explanation??); only one debriefing stage
Bottom line: It's very apparent that this mission was a quickie job, as is evident from the "created" and "modified" dates: from start to finish in only 1.5 hours.
At this point it's hard for me to say anything one way or the other. I can see that you're very competent with FRED, which is a plus. Do you have any other missions on hand (even if they're not in English) that you worked on for a while and put some effort into? Maybe some missions that took a couple of days before they were finalized?