All the changes below are completely optional. Most of the changes I suggested are to help the story flow better, but it does get all the major points across.
Well, except for the Vasudan Ale sentence
it showed how a citizen of Meridian, Alpha Centauri – 4 with whose youth was destroyed by Neo-Terran invaders and whose adulthood was filled with a will of vengeance.
The book exists today (it is, after all, what this is being read out of), so 'showed' should be 'shows'. 'Alpha Centauri - 4' should probably be changed to "Alpha Centauri 4", and a comma should be added after it. Change 'with whose' to just "whose". 'will of vengeance' pales in comparison with 'hearfelt vengeance'; something stronger should be used, perhaps the "fire of vengeance"?
I lost my mother when I was very young. I can hardly remember a speck of a detail of her. I was raised by my father in the Federal District of Meridian, a grand city governed directly by the GTVA in Alpha Centauri –4.
Thisd is a bit repetitious. Maybe write it like "Having lost my mother when I was very long, I can barely remember a speck of detail about her."
Also, you might want to introduce a nickname for Alpha Centauri -4 to add a bit of character to it )
But again according to my fifth grade teacher Mr. Jon Elson...
Should read "But then again, according to my fifth grade teacher Mr.Jon Elson..." 'But again' doesn't make sense.
I previously never had a speck of an idea that these conflicts would affect me personally. I could still remember that afternoon where the stillness was broken only by the joy of schoolchildren who walked home after their last day of school and the first day of vacation. A constant drone suddenly broke the laughter different from that of a shuttlecraft.
That last sentence just doesn't work, as it contradicts itself (The stillness was broken only by schoolchildren. Then the constant drone from a fighter broke it?). It also jumps from remembering in the present to back to storytelling in the past. The use of 'constant' and 'sudden' to describe the drone also contradicts itself. I'm not certain how this could be rewritten, perhaps:
"I can still remember that afternoon. I and my friends were walking home, the stillness broken only by the joy of schoolchildren after their last day of school and the first day of vacation.
Then, suddenly, the sound of an artificial droning-similar, yet strangely different from that of a shuttlecraft- broke through the innocent laughter of I and my friends."
It was a cacophonous noise that I never had heard before. The noise got louder and soon became unbearable. Suddenly out of nowhere, five military fighters in delta formation whizzed over my head. The heat from their engines soon pressured upon my tanned body.
The use of 'suddenly' is redundant, 'Out of nowhere' by itself would be better. The last sentence should probably replace 'pressed' for 'pressured', since I don't think 'pressured' is a word.
This should also end the paragraph started above.
Neighbors came out from closed doors to look at the fighter parade. As I walked closer and closer to my home, the louder the engine drones became. Something in my sense told me that this is not a normal military parade that most citizens of Meridian had seen before at Cape Hope down at the bay. There was something “dark” about the commotion, something perplexing.
The second sentence should read something like 'The closer I walked to my home, the louder...". Also, sentence three should replace 'is' with 'was'-it's in past tense. It looks like it's too long, too-add a comma after 'parade' while replacing 'that' with 'like'.
I finally arrived at my domicile at 27:15 GTVA standard time. I tried my best to relax and forget the unforgettable commotion when my father suddenly burst through the door screaming “I GOT THE JOB!” I knew immediately that he had received the plum of shuttlecraft pilot, which he mentioned unceasingly for the past two weeks.
A comma after '27:15' might make it sound better. Add a "had" in "...which he
had mentioned..."
I tasted Vasudan Ale for the first time in my life amidst the commotion.
This seems a bit random. Was there a party? Did you always want to try Vasudan Ale, and were able to sneak away with some while everyone was congratulating your father? If it's the former, (Which I think it is) change commotion to celebration.