Well, I've gone ahead and played it out of curiosity.
It's definitely better than Lost in the Mist. Flying around in a Loki is fun and the enemies weren't too difficult this time around.
Though, that being said, it was very very
short, much shorter than I expected, topping at about 2 minutes.
Also there's a bug with Aquarius wing being friendly when they probably weren't supposed to be friendly. Check the ships for their Teams, you probably forgot to set them to Hostile.
Writing-wise, while it's nice to see actual dialogue as opposed to the near total silence of Lost in the Mist, the writing is... weird. Why are a parent and their child flying military fighters? If they're not part of the GTVA, why are you able to contact Allied Command? If you ARE in the GTVA, why do you go "sightseeing" with your father who happens to be in the same squadron as you? Why is
your father in the same squadron as you?
My personal recommendations would be primarily working on making somewhat longer missions. The amount of stuff you put in these 2 minutes is alright, there just needs to be more than 2 minutes of it.
Lastly, I did manage to get this nice screencap of the NTD Jacobus jumping in: