Okay, some minor things with this mission. First, the Vasudan dialogue is odd.
"Power down your weapons and engines and surrender."
Just say power down and surrender. I know its been done to death but weapons and engines and surrender just doesn't sound right.
"Surrender now or we will engage you."
Just say, surrender now or face the consequences. Again, it has been said before, but "or we will engage you" doesn't exactly inspire confidence.
Change send to sent in this sentence "They send the subspace message! Orders, Command?"
"The Damocles is soon at the node"
The Damocles is closing in on the node sounds better, but that's your call.
"We are here to collect radiation values from the asteroids for the Naxos Research Company. What are you doing in here?"
Change in to out.
Now we come to the next part, mission difficulty. I have played this mission a good five times and not once have I been able to destroy the comms on the Damocles. The enemy fighter wings keep me occupied most of the mission, and I lose my wingmen too rapidly for them to help. I had to order them to engage the enemy to keep them alive, and that caused the Sopedu to die on one occassion. Maybe I'm missing something, but on medium I have been unable to complete this mission at all.
This may sound dumb, but losing one enemy wing wouldn't hurt the difficulty all that badly. The NTR should have a fighting chance, not an outright advantage. It takes too long to kill the enemy fighters on medium and then destroy the comm systems on the Damocles. Or, with my wingmen destroyed, the turrets on the ship pummel me senseless. An alternative might be to simply move the Damocles back further in order to allow more time. In any case, the difficulty on medium makes the mission impossible for me.
Also, shouldn't the disable objective have a directive? I know its not as important given what happens if you do it, but it seems important enough to warrant one.
Beyond those comments, there isn't much wrong with this mission except for the constant "NTR retards" quip, which gets old after a while.
Good work.