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General FreeSpace => FreeSpace Discussion => Topic started by: Anubis on December 11, 2002, 08:11:30 am
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sorry to bother ou guis but where can i post a campaign story... its kind of big so it will require some space...its over 180 pages long....in my notebook.....sooo......
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Shorten it.
A lot. :D
Post some teaser stuff here, if you want. ;)
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don't shorten it, mail it to some one with a website to publish it under your name, me for example. give me an e-mail via HLP,and i'll reply.
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or just type it all out (if you can) and post it in this thread
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180 pages?! you writing a novel or something? :eek:
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maybe it's a very small notebook ;)
like... this big:
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I learned something when I started writing... use word :)
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Originally posted by Knight Templar
I learned something when I started writing... use word :)
lol
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You'll be amazed how small it will be when you type it out. Really, though, you need to put it on the computer. A second read/write through will clear up issues quickly for you. Save it to a disk, then spread the magic where you need it.
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o.k. il try to shorten it....but let me give you a quiq info on what is happening....
So after cappela the whole gtva was in turmoil and it finali colapsed after several years....after that both the terrans and the vasudans decided to create the GTVF(Grand Terran Vassudan Federation). They amnaged to get things under some control and beguin rebuilding the fleets and economical societi....it went slow for the first few years but after wards it started to realy move...at a furios step.
After more then 30 years the GTVF managed to gather a huge armada larger then enithing up tho that point whit one Sd already complete built with the latest technology availabale...much more powerfull then the Colossus i mean it could take on the Sathany whit no problm what so ever.
Chapter1:"...Ashes to ashes and dust to dust...."
Flashback moment(from Adm. Andrew Petrov)
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That night:
alarm gooing of everywhere on the station...............
Petrov:"....what the....."
On the speakers:"All personel report to battle stations...we are unde attack....I repeat all personel report to battle stations...we are unde attack...."
a crewmen on board the station:"....sir you must report to the Independence at once..."
P:"Sorry son I guess we have to take a rain check on that visit"
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5min later on board the Independence:
Com:"Sir incoming message from the GTVF command"
P:"on screen"
"Adm.Petrov we are dealing with a serious situation here"
P:"No kiding"
"This is serious Andrew,as we speak a large NTVA force is heading your way.We need you to defend the scientific-military
station there at all costs"
P:"what about the civilian station here..?"
"Look taking on the NTVA ships and defend the 2 instalations is imposible.....I sugest you evacuate your famili from that station..."
P:"what about th reinforcements when are they comming.."
"Andrew the only destroyer close enough is the HADES but its ETA is 25 mins...so you must hold on till then.."
"Helm get us closer to that jump node i want to be able to open fire as soon as those ship exit that node"
"roger that"
P:"launch alll fighters and bommbers and asign the PegasusMK-IV to protect those instalations..."
Radar officer:"Sir incoming hostiles its an Orion MKII and Sobek MK-III corvette...they are launching theyr fighters and bommbers"
"Telll the fighters to take care of those enemy fighters will take care of those ships..."
P:"Fire alll forward beam cannons on that Orion and as soon as that corvette gets within 3000 meters of us fire all starboard batteryes on it and bring on line the RBFG and prepare to fire.."
G:"Sir the Sobek is in range..."
P:"Fire.."
radar:"incoming ship its a destroyer,Nebula class"
P:"wait till it gets in range and fire the RBFG on it "
Sens:"sir the civilian instalation is under heavi fire...its hulll integrity is beneath 50%..."
P:"Asign all pegasus interceptors to protect it"
RAdar:"incoming hostiles 2 cruisers Horus class..."
S:"sir the orion and the corvette are down and the Nebula is at 60%...but the Eden instalation is at 40% and dropping..."
P:"open a chanel with the instalation....."
P:"this is adm.Petrov you are ordered to evacuate at once I repeat evacuate at once.."
Eden:"Already on it....we need only 5 more mins til complete evac.."
P:"asign 3 more fighter wing to protect that instalation..."
R:"Sir incoming ship its a frigate Mirage class....sir they are powering up theyr jump drives..."
P:"What engage all rear turrets on that frigate as soon as it exits subspace...send 4 wings of bommbers to take out that corvette's wepons sistems and then destroy it..."
R:"the frigate has jumped"
P:"oh mi god...."
R:"exiting subspace now"
S:"Sir the Eden instalation is down...."
"sir we report several hul breaches and 75% of our turrets are down....our hulll integriti is at 45% and dropping..."
"sir we cant keep this up much longer..."
R:"sir an Orion MKII has jumped in.."
P:"all right evacuate all non esentiel personel..."
P:"Have mi wife and son made it out of that instalation....."
S:"cheking....cheking....oh no.....Im sorry Sir.."
P:"...oh no......."
P:"how many people were left on that instalation.."
S:"..15.000..sir.."
P:"my god...."
just then a tear drops from his eye..
P:"...launch the distress beacon and prepare youreselfs..."
R:"sir incoming ship its a Hecate MKII heavu destroyer ist the Hades sir.."
"Independence this is the Hades you mai stand down will take it from here..."
P:"helm get us out of the range of that destroyer's beam cannons.."
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more to come later..is you guis want...hope you liked it so far....
sorry about the speling but im from a non english speaking countri...Romania to more exact...
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ok, first, use correct spelling and punctuation ;)
I can barely underestand that.
Also, why would they make the GTVF if they already had the GTVA? I mean, there's no logical reason to even change the name, plus, Galactic Terran-Vasudan Alliance sounds better than Grand Terran-Vasudan Federation. No offense intended, though.
Also, I assume when you say NTVA, you mean Neo-Terran-Vasudan-Alliance, correct?
That's basically impossible, because the two races are fighting the GTVA to seperate the two races, so why would they then join togehter?
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I'm assuming it all makes sense in Anubis' head :)
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First of all the GTVA was inefective against the new arising problems,it wasn't created to deal with this kind of problems.
Second the new GTVF had more power over the former GTVA space and beyond,new sistems were beeing discovered.
Third the NTVA was a faction that had nothing to do with the old NTF or the HOL factions they wanted the old GTVA back more week then the federation and with limited power over the vasudan teritories...
GTVF was formed with a parlament wich could pass laws that were the same for both the terrans and vasudans...and a lot more stuf like that there...!
But eniway what did you think of the little flasback from Adm.Andrew Petrov? I would apreciate eni constructive critics...!
AND ABOUT THE SPELLING I AM VERRY SORRY BUT I AM FROM A NON ENGLISH SPEAKING COUNTRY....SOO BARE WITH ME!! THANKS!!!!!
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Oh, well, if you'd have said that in the first place - about the NTVA, I mean. I quite like that concept. So, The federation is a far more integrated alliance than the GTVA, but some people don't like the two species having so much power over each other's territories and laws and stuff - and those people formed the NTVA. Interesting. Just the sort of political squabbling us terrans like :nod:
Tip - try and get an native english speaker to proof-read and spell/grammer check your script if you do release a final version - certainly if you release that 180 page text, because not even HLP members would find 180 pages of engrish funny...
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So what does the NTVA stand for?
How about the AFKAG?
The Alliance Formerly Known As the GTVA?
J/K :)
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well what ca I say except you are right....I will write it down ave it to a disk and then sn it to someone to oret all speling mistakes.
Who wants it just let me know,and il send it to him.
P.S.:...you do know that it will take quite a while..to write it down......
eniway let mefill you in on som of the new ships....:
1)There is the Hecate MKII like the Hades
2)the Orion MKIII
3)new class of corvettes which have theyr own fighter bays
4)there are the SD like the Sathanos MKII andthe new Megalodon class SD(TV) and Adm.Bosch's own SD wich includes both terran and shivan tech
5) and thisisthe mostimportant the SC shivans and TV and from someone else as dangereous as the shivans.....and a lot more il fill you in on all the details later..!