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Off-Topic Discussion => General Discussion => Topic started by: Unknown Target on February 21, 2003, 10:01:59 am
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I was thinking of re-doing the original HLP movie and sending it in to see if I can get it filmed. Only problem is, not everyone surfs HLP, so I need to remove a lot of the "In" jokes. Would you guys mind helping me out a bit? If you wouldn't just post the original section with a possible replacement, and I'll see which is better. I probably won't use yours directly, I want this to be my own as much as possible, but I'll try to keep the basic idea, or maybe expand on it ;) Of course, all names will have to be changed, too.
For those that don't remember it, need a refresher, or just have never read it, here's the original thread:
http://www.hard-light.net/forums/index.php/topic,8704.0.html
Here's the compliled version, zipped up in word format:
http://unkown_target.tripod.com/HLP_Movie.zip
And the unfinished sequel is lurking on these boards somewhere...
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Great idea, I'll look at it whilst I'm away (going to a LAN party in a couple of hours), can we work in the death of Thunder and the arrival of Kalfireth into the new edition? ;)
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your download does not work... "you cannot link to this file"...
typical Tripod error
remember to tell people that instead of clicking on the file, to right click and click "Save-as", cause that always works, but clicking on it doens't
EDIT:
I lose in a fight against venom. how can that be, when i'm Stealth?
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this is the script as a webpage, perhaps easier:
htm
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Originally posted by Unknown Target
I was thinking of re-doing the original HLP movie and sending it in to see if I can get it filmed. Only problem is, not everyone surfs HLP, so I need to remove a lot of the "In" jokes. Would you guys mind helping me out a bit? If you wouldn't just post the original section with a possible replacement, and I'll see which is better. I probably won't use yours directly, I want this to be my own as much as possible, but I'll try to keep the basic idea, or maybe expand on it ;) Of course, all names will have to be changed, too.
For those that don't remember it, need a refresher, or just have never read it, here's the original thread:
http://www.hard-light.net/forums/index.php/topic,8704.0.html
Here's the compliled version, zipped up in word format:
http://unkown_target.tripod.com/HLP_Movie.zip
And the unfinished sequel is lurking on these boards somewhere...
1st thing. get it filmed? Eeh..whos gonna film it. Where are you gonna find people to act the characters?
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I don't appear in this "movie"
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If there is ever a sequel, we could fit you in as Kalifreth, but I don't see how we could fit both Thunder and Kalifreth into the same movie, try to figure it out why'll your gone...
Anywho, the major part I've decided to tug at right now is the ending. A lot of it needs to be re-done (the return of Setekh, that's gotta be removed, noone'll get that :(), and the thing where (I think it was venom) pulls the knife out of his stomach, that has to be clarified (at that point I was writing just to get it done).
Any suggestions on these?
Mystical, this was a bit before you, bud, srry :(
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*bump*
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I read that link. Good job UT:yes:. You have great writing skills! :)
[Off-topic]What ever happened to the welcome beam? We have quite a few new members.[/Off-topic]
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THe Welcome beam:
http://members.cox.net/wmcoolmon/images/welcome.gif
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I can see the movie now, Zooming in on the HLP logo with Terminator music in the background. :D :yes:
:nervous: Okay, maybe not Terminator...
(Yay, account works now! Thanks, Shrike. :) )
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Well, I have my very own combat scene :D
And if you guys forget to put me in it I'll rip your heads of your torso and.... :mad2: well we will see that when we get there... :devil:
*taps axe*
Now, gimme some more scenes!
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Originally posted by Stealth
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I lose in a fight against venom. how can that be, when i'm Stealth?
it is coz you're indeed just Stealth and I'm Venom, you puny little thing :devil:
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ok...damn this is hard re-writing this...right now I'm re-doing venom+stealth's fight (srry Stealth, you're still gonna lose :D), but enough ppl were puzzled over that knife thing, so I'm gonna take that out.
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Not sure if this is as good as the original or not, what do you think (it's probably a little shorter):
Original:
The battle is still going strong, however, the HLP Militia is really starting to win now. Bullet fire can be heard, but now it's growing more sporadic. We cut to the a smaller battle in the center of the room, between venom2506 and Stealth.
venom leaps over top of him, doing a flip in mid-air. He lands with his back facing Stealth, and as starts to whirl around, Stealth plants a kick right in the center of his back. venom Goes flying forwards into a wall. He recovers quickly, and lashes out with a random roundhouse punch in Stealth's direction.
He dodges it easily, and pulls back with his left arm to let out a punch. We cut to a waste as his right arm reaches down at the same time, to pull out a knife. We cut back to the previous view as venom dodges the fake left-handed punch. In doing so, he gets up near him. Stealth twirls his hand around and grips his arm, pulling him towards him.
Drawing his knife, he sends it through venom's gut. We cut to slow-mo as he bends forward at the waste. Cut to a side-view of his head. His mouth is open, his eyes wide. A clump of blood mixed with spit flys forward out of his mouth. Cut to normal speed as he slumps to the ground on his knees, clenching the knife in his gut. Cut to a close-up of Stealth's stony face.
Cut to a close-up of Venom's face. He's gasping for breath. Suddenly, he starts to breath more normally, but more softly. He grins and lifts his head slightly. We cut to a view of his solarplexus, oozing blood from the knife wound. He starts to slowly pull it out, and as he does so, the blood slowly starts to stop. Eventually, when he pulls it all the way out. He's not bleeding anymore, and
the blood around the wound is now caked into his vest. We cut to Stealth's face, and he registers a surprised look, as venom2506 lunges at him with the knife. Stealth is obviously taken by surprise, and stumbles backwards with less surety in his steps, as he struggles to dodge the knife swipes at his head. Each time it comes extremely close, but he pulls his head back just in time to miss it.
Suddenly, venom trips his advisory, sending him crashing to the floor. As he brings the knife up for the final blow, we cut to wEvil, talking with daveb, in his old and now abandoned headquarters.
New:
The battle is still going strong, however, the HLP Militia is really starting to win now. Bullet fire can be heard, but now it's growing more sporadic. We cut to the a smaller battle in the center of the room, between venom2506 and Stealth.
venom is pulling out all the stops. He jumps up to land a flying downwards kick, but stealth dodges it, and venom hits the floor. The camera shakes, and dust and metallic debrees fly up out of the small hole that venom made. He leaps out of the hole, doing a flip in mid-air, and launches a punch at Stealth. We cut to stealth's face, as he makes a quick visual confirmation of this move, and brings both his arms up to block the incoming punch. We cut to his feet as he is pushed back several feet, more dust flying up. We cut to a little higher up on his leg, as he pulls it back and brings it around. We cut to venom's hard-set face. Suddenly, he looks right at us as the kick comes up flying into him. We cut to black for a single second as the kick connects, and back to normal. venom flys away from the camera and into a wall. He slides down from it, momentarilly stunned. We cut back to Stealth, as he leaps into the air, sending a flying kick straight for venom's head. Venom ducks beneath it. We cut to his waist, as he pulls out a long, silver knife. As Stealth hits the floor and turns around, we cut to his POV. Suddenly, venom appears out of the bottom of the screen, knife upheald and flying into the center of the screen. Just as it hits, we cut to:
INT. wEvil's abandoned HQ
EDIT: Probably gonna have to re-write it again, darnit!
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i always win against venom... always :) :D
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*watches Stealth jab Ironic-Justice™ in the face and laughs*
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wow, you haven't changed a bit an0n
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*is scared*
*is confused*
*is kinda sleepy*
*just got a McChicken Sandwich and £10 for formatting the hard-drive of a laptop*
*thinks that's fair*
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*Thinks he should've made an0n's character more wierd*
;):D:p
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Originally posted by an0n
*thinks that's fair*
Agrees. :nod: *needs food now*