My comments are in italics.
______________Dangerous Games_______________
nice titleOver the last few years a great deal of anger and violence has disseminated over the youth of America, and
break here desperate for a reason many have blamed violence in the media in particular video games have been given the worst reputation among parents fearful for the safety of there children.
long run-on here, try cutting it into smaller bits But is this reputation deserved, or are video games just the scapegoat for bad parenting and bad schools.
thesis I take it, use question mark and expand the reasoning a bitThere have been countless studies
name some linking video games to violence in children, but there have also been studies that show the same affects with sports. "One of sports coverage's dominant messages is that the most aggressive athletes are rewarded. Viewers are continually immersed in images that highlight and commentary that praises athletes who most successfully employ physical, aggressive play, as well as toughness."
who said it and how, exactly, does this relate to video game studies, quote those as well to show the similarities Yet
try to limit the use of conjunctions (and, so, but, yet) at the start of sentences in most cases parent actually encourage involvement in sports, as they are good at forming teamwork and cooperation. Why is it that team based game modes like capture the flag (which are vastly more popular than the anarchy type modes like deathmach)
no parenthisis!!!, meld it into the sentence are scoffed at and castled as violent and mindless.
question mark It hardly seems fair that such a double standard has been imposed on a form of entertainment and literature that is just beginning to reach its potential.
is there a study that relates capture the flag with team sports? It seems that parental ignorance (not many parents actually play the games them selves)
do you know how many? any percentages? and the media insanity
bad word choice, try "sensationalism" instead around such issues has formed a general opinion that video games are solely responsible to the rage that has gripped our schools. Many special interest groups have seized the issue and exastrabated the problem by adding it to their agendas. As a result the world of gaming has been placed at the mercy of the American political system.
Most people assume that in the First Person Shooters you mindlessly walk through a building shooting anything that moves,
generally, that is true and in some cases this is a correct assessment
period but the
use "However," and cut the "the" games that hold to this outdated gameplay rarely do well.
do you have numbers on this? where's the reference? how do you know for sure? The most popular games today got that way because they have an involving and intricate plot and story with major character development and sharp plot twists, or because they have good team based gameplay in online play.
and you know this because. . . In many of these games there is graphic detail such as blood splattering and dismemberment,
only because that is what the consumers have demanded but in most cases it is almost humorous in that you can shoot someone with a small nuclear device they survive then you take one shot with a small hand gun and they explode into bouncing chunks of meat.
that doesn't really support your position, now does it? In multi-player games dead bodies will often disappear after a few seconds and is often like a game of tag (with guns). The old-fashioned shoot'em-up single player games like Doom and Quake have lost there popularity and given way to multi player games were you are part of a team (the latest installment of Quake had no single player game at all)
is that really any better? Is it even true? or more thinking games like Halflife
Halflife? If I want a thinking game, I do not think of Halflife. where you have to plan out how you are going to complete an objective, like rescuing someone form a heavily fortified base, if you want to succeed it's often better to not raise suspicions by shooting everything in sight.
Games that do this that are FPS: No One Lives Forever, Deus Ex, maybe one or two others, not Halflife.The basic motivation in most single player (and some online games) games has you pitted against some vast evil force, and often starts out with you or someone you love being somehow threatened by this evil, and by standing up and fighting, you save the world (country, family, your self, ect…) from destruction. The basic concept of good verses evil is ingrained into most ancient and modern culture as a very good thing,
is it really? Good vs. Evil has caused more chaos and destruction since man crawled out of the ooze. Think WWI, WWII, the Cold War, and the current war. and standing up to an oppressive force is in fact how this country was founded. In recent social history however passivism has become more popular and has become the dominant policy in most situations.
There are reasons for that BTW. The Peace movement that started in the
1960s has grown up and has turned into a slow moving nearly communistic
okay, uh, you probably need to watch yourself here, you're treading on dangerous ground force to remove defiance and individuality.
Proof? The polices of big government and redistribution of wealth have been spearheaded by this group, not that I am a big fan of other side with oversized corporations and selfishness, but the calls for censorship have come mostly (but not entirely) from the peace or religious side.
Guess what, the religious side is usually where the Hawks of our nations come from. Most people are in the middle and not having any personal experience are told what to think,
now this is getting on my nerves given only one side of the story they tend to agree.
This paragraph has nothing to do with your thesis besides pissing people off. Drop it.Video games and media/art (I do consider many games to be an art form)
you might, but do others? Find them to back up your idea in general have been under attack for as long as there has been art, and there is little chance of that changing, but there is a difference this time, video games are an emerging art form. It may become the next great form of literature, but it is still in its infancy. If you look back to the first radio, motion picture, or TV shows, you would see that the games are still at the "people running out of buildings because there's a train coming at them"
who says? stage were developers are still playing with the new powers they have been given, they have only recently begun making genuinely good stores
stories, and name some examples and imparting powerful emotion into there worlds. In twenty years the buzz of new graphics will be long over and the only thing that will mater is content. However as an emerging art form it is particularly vulnerable to censorship. If those who would deny us the right to experience what we want have there
their way the new age of interactive stores may fall and die. How many grate
great songs or movies or books have you read that didn't involve great conflict and some sort of violence,
you'd be surprised, I can't think of many.
name them as part of your support If you cut out the bad (which is what has been happening in our country) you leave a void,
period the world is real, and there is a great deal of violence in the world.
counter: If we get rid of the violence in video games, then the violence in the real world will go away, and this will be a good thing. If you tie an artists hands by telling them he must only make happy and uplifting non-confrontational works
, then you make it impossible for them to make anything but cookie cutter crap only good for making money from people in denial of reality.
nice attack against censorship, but you need to prove video games are an art form before you can argue that censorship "tie's the artists hands."The world of video games is walking a fine line this is a crucial stage in its development, between publishing companies trying to make the biggest profit and moral zealots trying to wipe it from existence the future is unclear. It may degenerate into a lawless genre of sex and violence or it may be censored out of existence,
are those the only options? If so, I'd rather it censored out of existence, thank you very much. it's future is not unlike that of the Internet
comma holding both great potential and at the same time great risks. In the end it is up to the people who use it, whether depravity wins out over art is entirely up to us
"those who play", not us. If the only people who patronize it are only interested in sex and violence then that is what it will become, but if we demand high quality well thought out stores and involving art then it may yet be a golden age on the horizon.
You've changed your arguement from "games don't kill people" to "non-violent games are high art and should be encouraged." One or the other please Censorship and politics of control are dangerous games being played with the fundamental rights of expression
Huh?!! When did the future of the gaming industry come up? This is not a conclusion, though it has some parts of one.---------
Generally, its not very good. It started out fine, then you went off on some bizzare "Americans can't think for themselves" thing that bugs the hell out of me, and has virtually nothing to do with the issue of Violence in Video Games. Being what it is, you need to show the side who claims violence in games is degrading socity, then show how those people are wrong. That's how an arguementative paper works.
Your real problem is you don't provide proof that what you say is true. Like I said, find quotes and comments that support your belief that games are a form of art. I take it that this is a research paper, so you'll have to make sure you say who said each comment. When doing so, use the last name of the author and the page number it was on (there's actually a bunch of rules in case you don't have one or another, so you'll have to look it up).
Spell checkers suck, so you might want to read through, aloud, the whole paper to catch the little errors that spell and grammer checkers won't catch.
Two final things: If you're going to post a paper/story/whatever, put a blank line between each paragraph for easier reading. Secondly, go post it over at
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