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Offline Setekh

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Offline icespeed

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none of thsoe are finished... ill give you guys some fnished ones to read...
$quot;Let your light shine before men...$quot;
Matthew 5:16

When I graduate, I'm going to be a doctor, and people are going to come to me looking for treatment and prescription drugs, and I'm going to give it to them. Is anyone scared yet?

$quot;If you confess with your mouth, 'Jesus is Lord', and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.$quot; Romans 10:9

 

Offline icespeed

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okay, so he posted them up.

be warned: qst is kinda long and its not finished yet, nowhere near finished...
actually, the inspiration for that came partly from the evil emperor document which most of you probably have forgotten about... its nowhere near the scenes i imagined it with yet. it's about... say... a sixth, a seventh, an eighth finished...
(i really have no idea when itll be finished, actually...)

the others... well, some are long and some aren't, half arent finished (works in progress) and...

inmy opinion, they are rather dodgy. they're all first drafts- i go back every now and then to fix unmatched bits, but they are all quite raw.

so, anyway, as the steak would say: enjoy!
$quot;Let your light shine before men...$quot;
Matthew 5:16

When I graduate, I'm going to be a doctor, and people are going to come to me looking for treatment and prescription drugs, and I'm going to give it to them. Is anyone scared yet?

$quot;If you confess with your mouth, 'Jesus is Lord', and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.$quot; Romans 10:9

 

Offline Dark_4ce

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Wow! Theyre really good! I also do a bit of writing myself, and I also get these "GREAT" IDeas, and write furiously for 2 days flat, and then just stop cold. Totally out of ideas. Hence the reason I went into comics. Small stories, that aren't too hard to finnish! But I have to admit, you're writing is really good! :D
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Offline Setekh

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You should see her drawings. They're... (can't figure out whether to say "just as good" or "even better") quite well done. :D
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Offline Dark_4ce

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Hey, actually, I'm kinda stuck in writing one of my stories out, and I'm thinking of getting someone else to help me write it. This is what I've done so far, and yes its VERY raw too, full of all sorts of mistakes. But anyway, if ya wanna take a peek;

Story Draft
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Offline CP5670

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Not my kind of fiction, but very good prose nevertheless. ;)

 

Offline Setekh

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Hey, that's pretty good, 4ce. :) I only skimmed it, but damn that ending hit me hard. :yes:
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Offline icespeed

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thanks everyone.
and i forgot to thank steak boy for posting those up...

dark4ce- its good. nice concept. nice style... nice structure...
the only thing i really want to say is to do with your technique- you dont use enough punctuation. it sounds a bit strange in some places without commas, semicolons... i guess im just used to that, though.
tell you i what do when i have a writer's block: ignore it for a while, then come back, read it all over and then cheat by working on a totally different scene... it usually works cos the different scene introduces new ideas that you can use in the main plot.
$quot;Let your light shine before men...$quot;
Matthew 5:16

When I graduate, I'm going to be a doctor, and people are going to come to me looking for treatment and prescription drugs, and I'm going to give it to them. Is anyone scared yet?

$quot;If you confess with your mouth, 'Jesus is Lord', and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.$quot; Romans 10:9

 

Offline Dark_4ce

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Originally posted by icespeed
thanks everyone.
and i forgot to thank steak boy for posting those up...

dark4ce- its good. nice concept. nice style... nice structure...
the only thing i really want to say is to do with your technique- you dont use enough punctuation. it sounds a bit strange in some places without commas, semicolons... i guess im just used to that, though.
tell you i what do when i have a writer's block: ignore it for a while, then come back, read it all over and then cheat by working on a totally different scene... it usually works cos the different scene introduces new ideas that you can use in the main plot.


Yeah, I know the comma problem too well. It's more like I write as it comes to my head, and only afterwards I go back to clean the writing up. But hey, yeah, I'll try and tackle the story from another scene, see if that helps me start off again. :D
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Offline icespeed

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just watch out you dont go on for pages about the same thing- youve had several scenes building up suspense, now go and get someone to find out what's happening.
and extend the story while you're at it.
$quot;Let your light shine before men...$quot;
Matthew 5:16

When I graduate, I'm going to be a doctor, and people are going to come to me looking for treatment and prescription drugs, and I'm going to give it to them. Is anyone scared yet?

$quot;If you confess with your mouth, 'Jesus is Lord', and believe in your heart that God raised him from the dead, you will be saved.$quot; Romans 10:9

 

Offline KillMeNow

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lets see the drawings then =)

(i appriate visual stuff more than text hehe)
ARGHHH

 

Offline Setekh

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The drawings will come after at least a week - we've got to get to school and then I get her stuff. :)
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Kennett approached her desk. He was a middle-aged man,


ATTACK OF THE HE-SHE's, RUN FOR THE HILLS!!!

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[edit]ok just read on abit makes sence now, my bad:D[/edit]
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ATTACK OF THE HE-SHE's, RUN FOR THE HILLS!!!


:wtf: eh are you drunk? :D (that's to be expected of a BDHR guy though :D)

 

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Offline Alikchi

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I can think up story ideas, but it's hard for me to put them into words. I go on spurts, like D4rk_ace (did I get that right? :p)

Currently I'm working on a story with a mixture of Thief and WWI technology. Here I'll post it up.

This is all I have so far..



<[HH]Alikchi^R> maybe a bunch of thieves + assassins all competing for a job, a treasure..a..hrnng..*brainstorms*
<[HH]Alikchi^R> I'm SUPPOSED to be making a mission for FS2 right now, but I'm not
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> What if a contractor hired two different assassins for the same job?
<[HH]Alikchi^R> incentive
<[HH]Alikchi^R> the one who kills gets the money
<[HH]Alikchi^R> then of course you'd have a rivalry
<[HH]Alikchi^R> you'd end up weeding out the bad assassins and only the best would be left
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> what if a third assassin didn't know about the other two? =)
<[HH]Alikchi^R> the top two assassins of the town, on one job, assassinating the sheriff
<[HH]Alikchi^R> hmmm
<[HH]Alikchi^R> but the third assassin has to do it for personal reasons
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> hmhm
<[HH]Alikchi^R> cause the contractor wouldn't have the watching theri backs the whole time
<[HH]Alikchi^R> okay, so this sheriff, he's the closest we've got to a good guy
<[HH]Alikchi^R> this Medieval Mafia guy has two assassins, bows, arrows, and flintlock pistols etc, dispatched to kill them
<[HH]Alikchi^R> one who kills the sheriff gets the money
<[HH]Alikchi^R> in the meantime, this other guy, a thief, has broken out of jail, and is attempting revenge on this guy
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> Hmmmmm... what does the contractor stand to gain from this?
<[HH]Alikchi^R> he can traffic his drugs and crap a heck of a lot easier
<[HH]Alikchi^R> the sheriff's been cracking down on crime
<[HH]Alikchi^R> I'll have it from the point of view of these four people: the thief, the two assassins, and the sheriff himself
<[HH]Alikchi^R> and, of course, the sheriff won't be a nice guy either
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> okie dokie
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> of course not
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> he already sounds like a right bastard =P
<[HH]Alikchi^R> because he's indiscriminately burning down bars and entire housing complexes that are "full of outlaws"
<[HH]Alikchi^R> and of course, the brigands who lurk outside the city
<[HH]Alikchi^R> now for a time period and setting
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> thief setting thief thief
<[HH]Alikchi^R> yes that would be good
<[HH]Alikchi^R> How about this..a world of magic and technology, like Arcanum
<[HH]Alikchi^R> you'll see mages, you'll see trolls with World War I - era Maxim guns
<[HH]Alikchi^R> perfect setup for a mafia-esque type thing
<[HH]Dragonfly^C> sounds good
<[HH]Alikchi^R> Molotov cocktails..hmm..this will be fun





Tye woke to the sound of a machine gun.
   
   The familiar roaring sound, the ripping, tearing resembling an entire company of soldiers firing their Tredegars at once, took him back to his days as a thief, the days he was free. "Everything was easier before the sheriff came," he muttered under his breath. Machine guns were a new thing. How the Sheriff had managed to get his bloody hands on one (or more?) before the military had gotten its share was a mystery. The machine gun finished its murderous work, the water jacket around its barrelhissing as it cooled the weapon. Through the tiny slit in the concrete roof of his cell he heard screams and moans. Either the sheriff was "striking back" against the "undesirables" of the city once again (that is, shooting prisoners or simply firing into suspicious-looking apartment buildings), or Uncle Luigi had decided it was time for a little striking back himself. More likely the former, the Mafia wasn't looking for a fight. The Mafia never wanted a fight. The boys in blue, however, did.
   
   Tye sighed and rolled out of bed. He rolled over and out and landed on the concrete floor, like he did every day. After a few months in the Sheriff's prisons, you learned to wake up early, but not too early; fast, but not too fast. Every moment of sleep was treasured. You learned to sleep through machine gun fire. If you didn't, you'd be beaten awake and dragged off to interrogation. Everyone in his cell block woke up at the same time, even though he didn't know what that time was. Tye didn't know what day it was, either, no matter the month. All he knew is that he had to be awake right now.
Sure enough, one of the Sheriff's Constables swaggered through the cell block, screaming name after name after name.
He stopped at Tye's name. He always stopped at Tye's name, every day for the past however many months it had been. He always seemed shocked that Tye didn't have a last name, it threw him out of his last name, first name rhythm. "Here," Tye chirped, and the fat prison guard resentfully moved on. The last names
were called, and the guard stomped out again, trying to look menacing but barely passing the "laughable" mark.
It was back to sitting. What else was there to do? The bureacracy was either too stupid or too smart to use their prisoners as forced labor.

Tye fell asleep to the rhythmic pounding of his own, quite audible heartbeat.
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