Not too shabby. I haven't decided if I like the harsh metallic reflecting yet, but at least it's original.
Things I would suggest to improve the picture:
1. Make it taller. The letterbox format makes it look crowded with the large text.
2. Antialias the text. It looks like you used Wordart, which is fine, but it tends to produce jagged-looking text. Run it through a smoothing filter or something like that.
3. Get some engine glows. The flames look nice, all you need are the FS2-style glow effects around the engines.
I know you may not be able to do all of these, but I throw them out for suggestion anyways.

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