The only problem with that is I want to keep with Volition's guidelines, the main one being that the intro cutscene both begin with you seeing a flowing blury stuff, then as the music builds, you find out what it is. How about this:
You see some blue blury stuff moving around as the music builds. "A MOD for Freespace2" "Created by Hades" Then you see that the bluish stuff is the GTD Galatea's engines. The camera zooms out and you see a picture of the GTD Galatea in space. You here an officer's voice saying "Alright pilots. I'm going to go over this one more time. The Vasudans have launched an Aten class cruiser and a wing of the new PVF Anubis class at the Galatea. Once you are launched, you are to clear out the Anubis' so our Apollyon bombers can get through." Camera cuts to a sideways/frontal view of the outside of the hanger. A few GTF Angels come out of the hanger and one of them says "Alright Alpha, let's kick some butt!!!"
An Aten class cruiser and three Anubis exit subspace and the Angels break to attack. A short, but furious dogfight ensues, and then a single bomber (The same kind from the fs1 intro) exits the hanger. A transmission comes from the bomber "This is Lt. Ash, flying Gamma One, Command said you needed a bomber."
Lt. Ash then dodges some turret fire from the Aten, and fires a volley of large rockets. This starts the Aten having electrical shocks running through it, then a blast from the Galatea finishes it off as Lt. Ash escapes. He flys away, and off the screen, then the Aten explodes. Everything turns black and the words "Descent Freespace" And in small letters beneath it "The Terran Vasudan War".
After the Aten is destroyed the last thing in the scene is Lt. Ash saying, "dang I'm good. I tell you, none of these Vasudans can kill me. God, or the devil, is gonna have to do better than that it one of them wants me dead.