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Offline TopAce

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Something I have just written in 10 minutes
Antecedences:

My keyboard sometimes does not recognise I pressed T, so I typed in 'raining' instead of 'training'. They apparently form a rhyme and both of them have a meaning, so they'd fit in a verse. So I was inspired and quickly wrote this:

I want to continue my training
but outside it is raining
and it is so cold
not to mention I am so old

Fencing would be cool,
I could engage any fool
with a saber in hand
and a turret on the land

I know I act towards the Dark side
What could turn the tide?
Patience is what I need to learn
and some experience to earn

I must walk in the path of light
and not engage anyone in a fight


I makes little sense, I know, but it was worth an attempt anyway.
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I already announced my retirement twice, yet here I am. If I bring up that topic again, don't believe a word.

 

Offline aldo_14

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Something I have just written in 10 minutes
It's not exactly Edwin Morgan, but it's not bad.  Especially for a non-native speaker, because it must be a right bugger trying to think in rhyme in a foreign language.

  
Something I have just written in 10 minutes
It's good. You might want to continue on with it, and don't worry, you can break the rhyme. No one will kill you if you do. ^_^

 

Offline Rictor

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Something I have just written in 10 minutes
Robert Frost ain't got nothin' on you.

 

Offline Nuclear1

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Something I have just written in 10 minutes
It's good. Keep it up. Like aldo said, it must be tough to try to write poetry in a foreign language, so I salute your effort. :yes:
Spoon - I stand in awe by your flawless fredding. Truely, never before have I witnessed such magnificant display of beamz.
Axem -  I don't know what I'll do with my life now. Maybe I'll become a Nun, or take up Macrame. But where ever I go... I will remember you!
Axem - Sorry to post again when I said I was leaving for good, but something was nagging me. I don't want to say it in a way that shames the campaign but I think we can all agree it is actually.. incomplete. It is missing... Voice Acting.
Quanto - I for one would love to lend my beautiful singing voice into this wholesome project.
Nuclear1 - I want a duet.
AndrewofDoom - Make it a trio!