I just finished playing through it; pretty good for the most part.

Some issues I noticed in general (not mission-specific):
lots of grammar errors in the text (briefings/cb's/debriefs/messages), although spelling is mostly good
you may want to change the default loadouts to make AIs perform better
background nebula placement is good, but remove the streched nebula images
add in a bit of silence to the end of the voice file (FS2 currently only shows the message "head" animation for a small instant)
some bad ship names
a few in-mission bugs (i.e. duplicated messages)
inaction periods are too long
Overall, a nice campaign.
