Icons in the briefing overlapped once, I'd prefer if both ships were on the escort list. But this was actually a pretty cool mission. It was simple, it worked. I liked the recommendation at the end when I didn't save my wingmate "listen to your wingmate's screams", made me lol. However, I don't think Vipers have FTL drives, maybe just something along the lines of "This mission isn't just about saving the freighter, you'll be equipped with prototype FTL drives. I've got a bunch of excited engineers taking up space on the flight deck, so bring them back in one piece." would help. Also, my wingman was a bit quiet, especially after he died, maybe a "Always scream on death" flag or scripted message might help. Don't let me choose from Cylon weapons in the loadout screen. I don't think you did the directive quite right, as they start fulfilled. You're meant to give them conditions as to when they'll be fulfilled, eg.
alpha defends freighter
- - has departed delay
- - - Gemenon Freighter
- training msg
- - time to go
And put the directive in that, that way the directive will only be fulfilled once the freighter jumps, and will be failed if the freighter's destroyed.
Overall though, good mission. Lots of events, debriefing, good briefing. Felt good.