[Moonfall-Wolf]

Hey everyone!
I've been on and off this forum for years, and recently I got hit with inspiration for a Freespace scenario. It's not really a campaign per say, its only like 2-4 missions, but the format is the same.

I've got the first mission pretty much done. It's not polished, and it doesn't have any voices, but I feel its gone as far as my single perspective can take it. So, I decided I'd come back on here and post it, and see what the community had to say about it.

I really want to know if this scenario is enjoyable, and how the mission plays out. Also, this is my first attempt at using FRED in years, so if anyone sees technical improvements that can be made (other than just sloppy chaining) I'm open to hearing it. If not, just let me know if you enjoyed it and what needs improvement! =D

I struggled with the directives and objectives system for a bit, so that's still kinda bare bones, but still, tell me what you think for the rest of it.

Mission is just titled "Scenario 1"
And I almost forgot; made with mediaVPs 3.6.12 as selected mod.

Looks like you much be logged in to download the attachment, and for anyone who doesn't know, you can run the mission from the "single mission" tab of the tech room after putting it in the Freespace->data->missions directory

Thanks!
Moonfall
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[mjn.mixael]

Here's my thoughts.

First I'll just say that I find the scenario a little silly. No Shivans sighted for however long.. and then suddenly a whole fleet + a Sath show up? It's a bit far fetched.

For the FREDing.

The beginning of the mission is weird. The briefing sets it up as a scanning and scout mission, but as soon as I start the mission I pass that objective and am told to warp to the battle group. So I have to ask.. why even have that part of the mission in the first place?

I moved my ship around before warping to the battle group. Good job, BTW, doing an in mission warp! However, moving my ship around caused my ship not to face down the center of the subspace tunnel. You can fix this by setting the player's orientation in the same event were you switch to the subspace warp.

Use the Escort list for friendly capital ships, especially if I'm supposed to be defending them!

The Shivan Ravana and the cruisers that warped in with it were so close together that they collided. You should spread them apart.

So, I'm blockading the node. Massive Shivan force attacks and we are told to retreat through the node. Except... none of the ships warp out in the node.. they just warp out right where they are!

Finally, the mission got stuck when the GTD Athena was guardianed and the Sath couldn't kill it. I suspect it was supposed to warp out too, but the Sath was in the way. This broke the mission and I had to just exit. I'm not sure what was supposed to happen after that, if anything.

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Here's what I would say. You have the skeleton of a decent mission here, even if the premise is a bit far fetched. Work on object placement and focus on figuring out fleet strategies rather than just throwing some capships at each other. Consider doing the mission in stages where the player has a very specific role to fill in the battle. Otherwise, this mission is lingering a bit close to BoE disease.

Keep going! You have the basic know-how to FRED, so practice, practice, practice!

[Moonfall-Wolf]

Alright, thanks for the feedback! Seems like I skimped on a lot more than I had thought, waaaay rushed the plot, and tried to do too much so everything came out lazy. Looks like getting a new perspective was a good idea XD

Irony here; the whole point of the next mission I had planned was a demonstrate that GTVA stategy beats shivan brute force, but I'll take to time to refine my skills with smaller scaled ideas before I try that, so I don't fall again into the novice trap of "how many warships can I get on screen" =p