[Goober5000]

What about:

HLP is a fan community built on Bringing Modders Together, a place where we can share our own hard work and draw inspiration from the work of others.

[General Battuta]

That's fine except lose the caps because they're incredibly dorky.

[InsaneBaron]

Made the change, broke the sentence in half for stylistic reasons. Liking the way this is going.

EDIT: revised the revision combining elements of my, Battuta's, and Goober's BMT ideas. Everyone like it?

[Goober5000]

That's fine except lose the caps because they're incredibly dorky.

I specifically put it in caps because I wanted to emphasize our slogan.  Lowercase provides no emphasis.

Bold or italic could be an option.

broke the sentence in half for stylistic reasons

EDIT: revised the revision combining elements of my, Battuta's, and Goober's BMT ideas. Everyone like it?

Where's the latest revision?

[General Battuta]

Yes, but emphasis is a bad idea - it feels corporate, disingenuous, artificial, and oily, like an unspoken (TM) (R) (all rights reserved) hovering over the sentence. Keep everything plain, unadorned, and genuine.

The best way to emphasize if you really want it is to give it its own sentence: We bring modders together.

[InsaneBaron]

Rather than repost the thing again I just modified my last post. I'm neutral concerning the emphasis issue.

Breaking the sentence in half=no longer relevant

[karajorma]

To be honest, I'd drop the whole Bringing Modders Together thing entirely. It sounds like it excludes people who just want to play the game. Lots of people on HLP have never even opened FRED or looked inside the VPs.

If you must use it, say that's what HLP started out as, but that it now means much more than that.



Secondly, I'd drop the mention of my FAQ. It definitely still has its uses and a lot of it is still relevant but it is pretty outdated now.

[InsaneBaron]

To be honest, I'd drop the whole Bringing Modders Together thing entirely. It sounds like it excludes people who just want to play the game. Lots of people on HLP have never even opened FRED or looked inside the VPs.

If you must use it, say that's what HLP started out as, but that it now means much more than that.



Secondly, I'd drop the mention of my FAQ. It definitely still has its uses and a lot of it is still relevant but it is pretty outdated now.

I'll let you three figure out the Bringing Modders Together thing; that's a matter for senior members.

I'll remove the FAQ then.

[InsaneBaron]

Last call for feedback before I post this after my next class.

[InsaneBaron]

Aaaand POSTED. Still need someone with mod privs to sticky it. Thanks everyone!

[General Battuta]

Cut 'A brief explanation.' - the opening question implies that.

You've got an extra 'can' in here: We're dedicated to bringing modders together and giving them a place to can share their own hard work and draw inspiration from the work of others.

I'd cut 'incomplete' from Battuta's Guide since the functional component is complete.

Otherwise looks decent.

[Luis Dias]

[InsaneBaron]

Cut 'A brief explanation.' - the opening question implies that.

You've got an extra 'can' in here: We're dedicated to bringing modders together and giving them a place to can share their own hard work and draw inspiration from the work of others.

I'd cut 'incomplete' from Battuta's Guide since the functional component is complete.

Otherwise looks decent.

I'm on it! Glad this turned out so well.

EDIT: I removed "incomplete" and replaced it with "hardly exhaustive"- more accurate and more positive, still makes the point that there are plenty of great campaigns that aren't on the list (yet). Side note on that, I'd nominate Sol: A History for the list, but we can tackle that in the appropriate thread.

About the "explanation" part, I thought it might be helpful to clarify that "What is HLP?" is a thread answering the question, as opposed to some guy asking it. However, now that I realize it, once you actually open the thread it's obvious. Maybe include it in the thread title?

[InsaneBaron]

Last thing: who can sticky it?

[AdmiralRalwood]

I'd change the formatting slightly so that the titles of the sections and the content of those sections don't run together so much. Something like this:

What is Hard Light Productions?

1. What is FreeSpace?

FreeSpace: The Great War and FreeSpace 2 are mission-based space combat simulators, like X-Wing/TIE Fighter and Wing Commander. Among the greatest games of the genre, they were also effectively the last.

The FreeSpace series follows humanity and their Vasudan allies as they fight to withstand the xenocidal, enigmatic Shivans, a species of unknown origin, vast technological capability, and seemingly limitless malice.

2. What is Hard Light Productions?

HLP is[...]

Also, the title of the overall thing shouldn't be identical to one of the questions therein... but I'm not sure what to change it to.

[InsaneBaron]

I'd change the formatting slightly so that the titles of the sections and the content of those sections don't run together so much. Something like this:

What is Hard Light Productions?

1. What is FreeSpace?

FreeSpace: The Great War and FreeSpace 2 are mission-based space combat simulators, like X-Wing/TIE Fighter and Wing Commander. Among the greatest games of the genre, they were also effectively the last.

The FreeSpace series follows humanity and their Vasudan allies as they fight to withstand the xenocidal, enigmatic Shivans, a species of unknown origin, vast technological capability, and seemingly limitless malice.

2. What is Hard Light Productions?

HLP is[...]

Also, the title of the overall thing shouldn't be identical to one of the questions therein... but I'm not sure what to change it to.

I like the size suggestion... will implement after next class. "What is HLP" is the main question, so I think it works as a title.

[Mongoose]

I could sticky it, but honestly I think the far more ideal solution would be to get it made into its own page linked prominently from the top menu.  I don't know that most of the people who would benefit most from seeing it will bother to read it as a stickied thread.

[InsaneBaron]

I could sticky it, but honestly I think the far more ideal solution would be to get it made into its own page linked prominently from the top menu.  I don't know that most of the people who would benefit most from seeing it will bother to read it as a stickied thread.

It's already been stickied, however I agree that linking it in the menu would be a great idea.