Here's a list of new write-ups I've made for some MODs that I DL'ed from the Incidental Warfare website the other day:
GTF Vesuvius by Aldo
GTB Peregrine by Aldo
GTCa Warlock by Aldo
GTI Scylla by Dark
GTI Acheron by Robin Varley
GVI Cairo by Bobboau
GTCv Phobos by Woomeister
SI Arachnas by Woomeister
I took it on my own initiative to make these write-ups because these are (IMHO) some excellent MODs but their tech descriptions had some grammar errors. I made these new write-ups in the hope that the MODders would see them and update their MODs with these new write-ups. (It seems a shame to me to have such good MODs with less than grammatically perfect tech descriptions.)
Anyway, here are the new write-ups (along with some notes I made along the way).
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GTF Vesuvius
OLD Tech Description:"The Vesuvius is the next generation of GTVA space superiority fighters. Improving on the Myrmidon in almost every area, the Vesuvius is one of the most powerful and versatile fighters in the GTVA. It's successful deployment in quelling fringe rebellions has seen it become the standard GTVA fighter."
New Write-up: "The Vesuvius is the next generation of GTVA space superiority fighters. Improving on the Myrmidon in almost every area, the Vesuvius is one of the most powerful and versatile fighters in the GTVA. Its successful deployment in quelling fringe rebellions has seen it become the standard GTVA fighter."
Additional Notes: The only error that I changed here was "it's" to "its".
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GTB Peregrine
OLD Tech Description: "The GTB Peregrine is a multi-role bomber, capable of performing as a fighter. The Peregrine is most commonly used as a strike bomber, or as an anti-bomber ship, launching long range trebuchets. In close combat, the Peregrine is almost as good as any other ship in the GTVA. The remarkable abilities of the Peregrine lie in it's advanced Darwin-Helis reactor system, which allows unparalleled strength. However, the shortage of suitable materials means only a select few squadrons have recieved a complement of this ship.", 3010)
New write-up: "The GTB Peregrine is a multi-role bomber, capable of performing as a fighter. With its variable payload, the Peregrine is most commonly used as either a strike bomber carrying bombs and torpedoes, or as an anti-bomber ship launching long-range Trebuchet missiles. In close combat, the Peregrine is almost as good as any other ship in the GTVA arsenal. The remarkable abilities of the Peregrine lie in its advanced Darwin-Helis reactor system, which provides unparalleled power. However, only a select few squadrons have received a complement of this ship due to the scarcity of suitable construction materials."
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GTCa Warlock
("The GTCa Warlock is one of the largest spacefaring warships ever constructed. Over 4.8km long, it's vast hull can hold 100 wings of fighters and bombers. In addition, the warlock is armed with the most advanced GTVa beam weaponry, able to engage multiple attacking destroyers. Part of the new supercarrier class, Warlocks head the 1st, 2nd and 3rd fleets of the GTVA, and a further 2 are under construction in Deneb.", 3057)
New Write-up: “The GTCa Warlock-class supercarrier is one of the largest space-faring warships ever constructed. Over 4.8 kilometers long, its vast hangar can accommodate 100 wings of fighters and bombers. In addition, the Warlock is armed with the most advanced GTVA beam weaponry, enabling it to engage several hostile destroyers at once. Three Warlocks have been assigned as flagships to the 2nd, 4th and 5th Fleets and another two are under construction in Delta Serpentis.”
Additional notes: 1st Fleet is at Earth, which is still cut off (morale issue: see FRED Zone) and Deneb is a Vasudan system, but this is a Terran ship so it has to be constructed at a Terran shipyard so that is why I changed it to Delta Serpentis (it’s the Terran capital system and seems like the most logical place to construct a warship of this size). Also, the 3rd Fleet was stationed at Capella, the system that wasdestroyed by the Shivan supernova. Any ship assigned to the 3rd Fleet that escaped from Capella (like the GTD Aquitaine) was probably reassigned to a still-existing fleet. Please see my FRED Zone Guidelines to see a set-up of the GTVA Fleet Organization. The link is here:
http://pub11.ezboard.com/fjtofrm11.showMessage?topicID=23.topic --------------------
GTI Acheron
OLD Tech Description: "The Archeron is the newest in defence beam technology, unlike the Mjolnir Cannon this is a small installation. It has 4 Main Cannons and Several Smaller weaponary. When used in numbers it can easily take out a Ravana Class Destroyer.", 3041)
New write-up: “The GTI Acheron is the newest development in front-line defense platforms. It is similar to the Mjolnir remote beam cannon in that it has been designed to help protect vital front-line installations. However, unlike the unmanned Mjolnir, the Acheron carries a modest crew complement of gunners, thereby qualifying it as a small installation rather than a gun platform. Armed with 4 beam cannons and 12 laser, missile and flak turrets, the Acheron can defeat most cruisers. When used in groups, the Acheron is easily capable of repelling a Ravana-class destroyer.”
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GTI Scylla
OLD Tech Description: "In the time after the Hades rebellion of 2335, The very first Scylla class installation was produced. These installations have been built for Shivan weaponry study. The first beam laser was created by a Vasudan in the Remnent, a Scylla class installation. Scyllas have a large beam cannon, used mainly for weapon testing, AAAf, along with Laser, and Flak turrets, provide for minimal defense. Where these fail, though, the Scylla has a fighterbay with 2 fighter and bomber wings, strong enough to destroy any threat that may come. These Outposts though used to be part of a GTVA mining network and were converted. The NTF took some of these stations and claimed them as their own, and even used their design on some installations, so not all are known.", 3054)
New Write-up: "The Scylla-class installation was first constructed after the Hades rebellion in 2335. While these installations were primarily designed for asteroid mining, several Scylla outposts were since converted to beam weapon research and development. Scyllas are armed with a large beam cannon (used mainly for weapons testing), and 12 laser, missile and flak turrets. It also has a hangar bay capable of housing 20 fighter wings. During the NTF Rebellion, several of these installations were captured by the Neo-Terran Front and refitted as outposts but were since recaptured by the GTVA when the rebels were defeated in 2367."
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GVI Cairo
OLD Tech Description: "the GVI Hathor is a large Vasudan installation commssioned just recently, it is mainly used in systems that have large military outposts, where arcadias are not equiped with beams Hathors have enough firepower to take out a destroyer., it is comparable to the terran Arcadia installations. Though slightly smaller, it packs a much more powerful punch with four large beam cannons, and six anti-fighter beams. Its design is much more oriented to capital ship defense than bombers, which has proven a hindrance at times. But it's expansive fighter bay can accommodate more than 30 fighter or bomber wings.", 3054)
New Write-up: "The GVI Cairo installation is comparable to the Arcadia and, like its Terran counterpart, serves many of the same functions, including coordination of military forces. The most prominent difference between the two is that the Cairo has far more potent anti-warship beam weaponry. Though slightly smaller than an Arcadia, the Cairo packs a more powerful punch with its 26 turrets, including five large beam cannons. Its design is oriented more towards capital ship defense than the repelling of bombers, but the Cairo makes up for this with its expansive hangar bay that can house 30 fighter and bomber wings."
Additional notes:
New: $Closeup_pos: 0.0, 0.0, -3162
this was changed from: $Closeup_pos: 0.0, 0.0, -2762
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GTCv Phobos
OLD Tech Description: "After the success of the Deimos Class Corvette, work began on a far tougher warship. The Phobos is the most heavily armed corvette in the GTVA. With 41 turrets it has the capability to fight against any class of known warship. Command hopes that the Phobos will be in service for decades to come. With the GTCa Warlock the Phobos has the newest in Beam Weaponary, information about this is classified level Phi.", 3056)
New Write-up: "After the success of the Deimos-class corvette, work began on a far tougher warship. More massive than a Deimos, the Phobos is the most heavily armed corvette in the GTVA. Armed with 41 turrets, it has the capability to hold its own against any class of known warship. Like the GTCa Warlock, the Phobos is armed with the newest beam weaponry. Due to its superb design, Allied Command expects that the Phobos will be in service for decades to come."
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SI Arachnas
OLD Tech Description: "The Arachnas is the first Shivan Installation ever encountered by the GTVA. It seems to be a repair facility and an outpost for the Shivan Fleet. Unlike the Shivan Capital ships, the Arachnas is lightly armed with only 20 turrets, however it is very dangerous for small craft and even corvettes. Though a destroyer would easily defeat it.", 3063)
New Write-up: “The Arachnas is the first Shivan installation ever encountered by the GTVA. Far larger than the Arcadia or Cairo-class installations, it seems to double as both a military outpost and a repair facility for the Shivan fleet. Despite its light armament of only 20 turrets, the Arachnas' weapons and fighter complement pose a very dangerous threat to fighters, cruisers and even corvettes. However, its relatively light armament is believed to render it vulnerable to larger warships.”
Additional Notes: It looks too small in the tech database (its closeup value should look like this: “$Closeup_pos: 0.0, 0.0, -4500”) and it needs to have its score increased from 0 to 10000 (the same value as a Shivan juggernaut which has the same hit points as an SI Arachnas).
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Here's hoping that people like these descriptions enough to use them.
EDIT: I did a little more fiddling with the text (updated as of 3:30am EST Jan 17, 2002) so it is current now.
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