Really good stuff as usual UT!!!
You're just getting better and better. You've almost created a new form of literature. Its script writing with almost prose like fluidity. You pritty much tell us what the camera sees, therefore what we see, with all the edits put in, hell its the next best thing to watching the thing on the big screen!
How many pages is this btw? how you counted yet? I'm gonna definitely print this whole thing out and make my own hard-bound edition of it when its done.