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Offline Unknown Target

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Did I put you in before somewhere?  (Sorry if I forgot)

Anyway, make sure to check the Art forum by the end of today. In a couple hours I'm going to be posting art sketches from the movie, in case anyone with some free time wants to do some modeling :)
EDIT: Pictures have been posted :)


SCENE TWENTY-ONE. EXT. STAGING AREA, SPACE – NIGHT.


We open to a vast star field, rotating silently around us. Suddenly, out of the vastness appear the same warp holes, and the six ships shoot out into the surrounding area, the warp holes closing quickly behind them. We cut to:

SCENE TWENTY-TWO. INT. GRANDEUR BRIDGE – NIGHT.

LIGHTSPEED is now standing up in front of his chair, and the holographic displays have moved out wards a bit in front of him. He turns to look at the CREWMEMBER #1 behind him.

LIGHTSPEED: Confirm jump location.

A seconds delay, then the CREWMEMBER #1 responds from his console.

CREWMEMBER #1:Jump location confirmed. All stations reported in.

LIGHTSPEED nods and turns back to face the front of the bridge. He reaches out and gently taps one of the displays hovering in front of him. Up pops the diagnostics of his five-fighter escort. Tapping on the lead fighter, it enlarges and glows red.

LIGHTSPEED: Alpha one, come in, over.

We cut to:

SCENE TWENTY-TWO. INT. CORSAIR’S COCKPIT – NIGHT.

CORSAIR is surrounded by instrument panels, a green glow falling on his face, giving him a surreal edge. The stars glitter softly behind the protection of his canopy.

CORSAIR: Alpha one acknowledging. Requesting orders, over.

LIGHTSPEED: Alpha is to go under and investigate the enemy presence. Follow the mission briefing for further details, over.

CORSAIR: Roger that Package Lead. Requesting vector to target area, over.

LIGHTSPEED: Vector is…(a short pause)…twenty-two, niner, five, niner, four hundred klicks.

CORSAIR: Vectors confirmed. Alpha is going under. Over and out.

We cut to:

SCENE TWENTY-THREE. EXT. CORSAIR’S FIGHTER – NIGHT.

We see a small figure turn to the fighters flying in formation beside him. He gives a thumbs up sign, and depresses a button on his control panel. Cut to:

SCENE TWENTY-FOUR. INT. GRANDEUR BRIDGE – NIGHT.

We open to see CREWMEMBER #3, sitting at a console. He turns around in his swivel chair to face LIGHTSPEED, who is still facing the front of the bridge, looking at the starry sky beyond.

CREWMEMBER #3: Sir, the fighters have gone under and disappeared from our radar.

LIGHTSPEED gives a nod of acknowledgement without turning.

LIGHTSPEED: God speed pilots…

Cut to:

SCENE TWENTY-FIVE. INT. CORSAIR’S FIGHTER – NIGHT.

The eerie green glow is now replaced by an intermittent red pulse, emanating from small light bulbs on the sides of the cockpit. The once-bright instrument panel is now dulled, and some of the instruments are blacked out.

CORSAIR: Alpha wing, prepare to confirm stealth mode.

CORSAIR moves his throttle backwards, and we cut to:

SCENE TWENTY-SIX. EXT. FIGHTER FORMATION – NIGHT.

We see CORSAIR’s fighter, formerly in the lead, suddenly fire retro thrusters and shoot back behind the formation. Stopping about forty feet behind them, it bobs up and down, the powerful engines working at minimum possible thrust to sustain the formation.
Cut to:

SCENE TWENTY-SEVEN. INT. CORSAIR’S FIGHTER – NIGHT.

CORSAIR looks down and presses a few buttons on his instrument panel, then looks up at the fighters in front of him. His gazes passes from fighter to fighter as he speaks to each of them. The voices of the pilots are fuzzy and distorted by the static of the radio.

CORSAIR: Gortef, confirm stealth mode and call sign, over.

GORTEF: This is Gortef. Call sign Alpha Two. Stealth mode active, over.

CORSAIR: Trashman, confirm stealth and call sign, over.

TRASHMAN: Trashman here. Stealth on and call sign confirmed as Alpha Three, over.

CORSAIR: Acknowledged. Janos, confirm stealth and call sign, over.

JANOS: Janos confirms as Alpha Four, stealth active, over.

CORSAIR: Karajorma, you’re the last buddy. Confirm stealth active and callsign, over.

KARAJORMA: Karajorma accepts and acknowledges as Alpha Five, stealth is active, over.

CORSAIR presses a few buttons, and we cut to:


SCENE TWENTY-EIGHT. EXT. FIGHTER FORMATION – NIGHT.

CORSAIR’s fighter lurches forward with a sudden burst of thrust, and once more resumes its position at the lead of the formation.

CORSAIR: Call signs accepted. Alpha, follow me.

His fighter rolls over to the left, and the four following craft do the same, barreling over and plunging down. We cut to:
« Last Edit: February 11, 2005, 04:55:55 am by 368 »

 

Offline Gloriano

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it's really good to see that you started doing HLP movie again it's been fantastic so far
You must have chaos within you to give birth to a dancing star.- Nietzsche

When in despair I remember that all through history the way of truth and love has always won; there have been tyrants and murderers, and for a time they can seem invincible, but in the end they always fall.- Mahatma Gandhi

 

Offline Corsair

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Oh... my... god. I'm Alpha 1!! :):yes: That just made my day. Really, it did. I get home from school to this... heheheh... the life of a fighter jock for me!
Wash: This landing's gonna get pretty interesting.
Mal: Define "interesting".
Wash: *shrug* "Oh God, oh God, we're all gonna die"?
Mal: This is the captain. We have a little problem with our entry sequence, so we may experience some slight turbulence and then... explode.

 

Offline Singh

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well, at least you know you wont be cannon fodder at least. Alpha 1 always survives! :D

UT: Great work as usual man :yes:

Silly question: do i show up in here as cannon fodder? :nervous: Do I show up at all? :shake:
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Dreamed of much, accomplished little. :(

 

Offline Goober5000

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Or what about Lt. Cannonfodder... :nervous:

 

Offline TrashMan

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Who! I'm in! (anyone notice that i didn't confirm my stealth status? Attentional or a slip up UT?)

Great job UT! now I'm gonna name a ship class I make after you...no wait..that would be a bit akward..Oh well, I'll think of something! just don't let me die!:D
Nobody dies as a virgin - the life ****s us all!

You're a wrongularity from which no right can escape!

 

Offline Corsair

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Oh, crap. Trashman, you're gonna get us all killed.
Wash: This landing's gonna get pretty interesting.
Mal: Define "interesting".
Wash: *shrug* "Oh God, oh God, we're all gonna die"?
Mal: This is the captain. We have a little problem with our entry sequence, so we may experience some slight turbulence and then... explode.

 

Offline WeatherOp

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I wanna be a Nebula Forcaster.:lol: Anyways, still getting better,but, I want EXPLOSIONS!;7
Decent Blacksmith, Master procrastinator.

PHD in the field of Almost Finishing Projects.

 

Offline Unknown Target

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This is sort of short, but hopefully I'll be able to post more later. If not, well, at least you guys get something :)
And that was a typo, Trashman, sorry :D It's been corrected. Your stealth mode is on.


SCENE TWENTY-NINE. EXT. TARGET AREA – NIGHT.

We are now deep inside an asteroid field. The colossal space-born hunks of rock drift by, temporarily obscuring our view. A particularly giant hunk floats past, and when our vision clears, we see a massive starship, thousands of feet long, sailing towards us. Beneath it hover several smaller vessels. Suddenly, CORSAIR’s squadron roars from behind us, jetting quickly towards the enemy fleet. We follow them, as they jut in and out of the asteroid field, separating, closing, and doing everything they can to avoid the asteroids that are closing in around them. CORSAIR’s voice comes over the radio, calm and commanding.

CORSAIR: Alphas four and five, are you ready to deploy ECMs?

JANOS: Alpha four go.

KARAJORMA: Alpha five go.

CORSAIR: Alpha four and five, deploy ECMs.

We see two large pods underneath KARAJORMA’s and JANOS’s fighters blow off of their fighters, sending them hurling below them. A bright line ripples down their centers, splitting them in half, revealing a mass of machinery. A red light blinks in and out.

JANOS: Alpha Four here. Sensors deployed.

KARAJORMA: Alpha Five – sensors deployed.

CORSAIR: Alpha is beginning their run.

The fighters veer towards the fleet, which we can see is comprised of about twenty ships, all of varying sizes. Alpha approaches the largest one first. Slipping silently into formation beside it, TRASHMAN’s fighter turns sideways, facing the colossal ship.

TRASHMAN: Alpha three beginning scan. Cover me.

CORSAIR: Roger Alpha Three. Alpha wing, set up guard positions around Alpha Three.

GORTEF: Roger.

JANOS: Roger.

KARAJORMA: Roger.

Cut to:

SCENE THIRTY. INT. TRASHMAN’s COCKPIT – NIGHT.

TRASHMAN is working hard at his controls, struggling to keep the fighter in perfect alignment with the massive Battlecruiser. The hulking form of the ship is outlined and shaded in green on his canopy. Two lines are slowly moving across the ship, and a blinking red SCANNING is flashing above the target. This goes on for a few seconds, until finally the SCANNING changes to SCAN COMPLETE and disappears. The green around the ship does the same, leaving it her natural color.

TRASHMAN: Three here, scan complete. Reading data.

TRASHMAN looks down at his panel for a few seconds as the data from his scan comes through. His eyes widen as he does so.

TRASHMAN: ****!

Cut to:

 

Offline Janos

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Trashman, jump! Trashman! NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO :(
lol wtf

 

Offline Unknown Target

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Here, added:

SCENE THIRTY-ONE. CORSAIR’s COCKPIT – NIGHT.

CORSAIR is sitting, alert and expectant, a finger tapping up and down on his throttle column. Suddenly, TRASHMAN’s voice, hurried and urgent, breaks through the silence.


TRASHMAN: Three here. We’ve got a problem Alpha.

CORSAIR suddenly perks up at this news. His finger stops tapping and instead he grips the throttle tightly.

CORSAIR: This is One. What’s the problem?

TRASHMAN: I’ve got a scan on the main ship in the fleet, ship is confirmed as a Battlecruiser, I repeat, ship is confirmed as a battlecruiser, Registration BC-21, port of calling, Battlecruiser Online.

CORSAIR’s shifts his hand on the throttle and looks around his cockpit instinctively.

CORSAIR: (Under breath) ****.

He looks back up and rolls his fighter slightly to the side, looking down at one of the vessels below the Battlecruiser.
CORSAIR: Alright guys, keep it cool. There’s another vessel down there. Let’s finish this up and we can go home.

We cut to:

 

Offline Goober5000

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:lol:

Best. Plot Development. Ever. I so didn't see that coming. :lol:

 

Offline Corsair

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Oh man, it keeps getting better and better.
Wash: This landing's gonna get pretty interesting.
Mal: Define "interesting".
Wash: *shrug* "Oh God, oh God, we're all gonna die"?
Mal: This is the captain. We have a little problem with our entry sequence, so we may experience some slight turbulence and then... explode.

 

Offline TrashMan

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You bring the Devil(tm), Derek (un)Smart into this! Brilliant! :yes:
Nobody dies as a virgin - the life ****s us all!

You're a wrongularity from which no right can escape!

 
Go get em Corsair. :yes:

 

Offline Grey Wolf

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Did I put you in before somewhere?  (Sorry if I forgot)
Nah, I've just been campaigning to get into the story as I'm the probably the most senior active member of the community to not make an appearance in any of your stories :)

If you want inspiration, choose either one of my titles :p
You see things; and you say "Why?" But I dream things that never were; and I say "Why not?" -George Bernard Shaw

 

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Originally posted by Unknown Target
TRASHMAN: I’ve got a scan on the main ship in the fleet, ship is confirmed as a Battlecruiser, I repeat, ship is confirmed as a battlecruiser, Registration BC-21, port of calling, Battlecruiser Online.


"Trashman, see if you can get into the Battlecruiser's docking bay."

 

Offline TrashMan

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"I can't capt'n! The fighter can'ne take no more!.....Besides the fighterbay seems to be blocked by an invisible force field." :D
Nobody dies as a virgin - the life ****s us all!

You're a wrongularity from which no right can escape!

 

Offline Singh

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duuuude! Sweet plot development! But whatever happens...dont mention his evil name thrice! Otherwise he may just show up :nervous:
"Blessed be the FREDder that knows his sexps."
"Cursed be the FREDder that trusts FRED2_Open."
Dreamed of much, accomplished little. :(

 

Offline Genryu

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As long as it isn't Battlecuiser Millenium :D
Man is making better fool proof machines everyday. Nature is making bigger fools everyday. So far, Nature is winning.
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"What difference does it make to the dead, the orphans, and the homeless, whether the mad destruction is wrought under the name of totalitarianism or the holy name of liberty and democracy?"
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