Okay, I've tried to remain reasonably civil, but with the grammar checkers and others apparently not able to read the original criticisms it's time to give 'em both barrels because nothing else is getting through. Yes, the grammar is awful and too perfect at the same time, but Axem, myself, and Woolie also presented QUITE A FEW OTHER CONCERNS BESIDES GRAMMAR. Bigchunk, you don't get it. Klaustrophobia, you don't get it either. Go back and read the original postings again.
No military organization could function in this fashion. The rules of acceptable behavior within a military organization have changed very little since the Middle Ages. They are not born of culture, but of the fact you are fighting very basic biological instincts for self-preservation; there is a reason they all look alike, it's called parallel evolution. TopAce's dystopian future military could never manage to fight a war. It would only barely manage day-to-day operations. This is not negotiable. Such behavior would not fly under Genghis Khan, it would not in medieval Europe, it would not under Robert E. Lee, it would not in the Waffen SS, it will not today in modern China (or anywhere else for that matter).
Actual conversation does not adhere perfectly to the rules of grammar. Go watch a television show.
You cannot tell the player how to feel. It doesn't work, it typically just upsets them and breaks suspension of disbelief.
There are actual stage directions. "Use Time Compression". "Don't use Time Compression". Do you want me to totally cease my suspension of disbelief? That's a dealbreaker in the rawest form, letting the audience see the stage directions. You can't do that, not in a serious work. Maybe William Shakespeare could get away with that kind of thing, but neither you nor I are William Shakespeare.
Dealing In Extremes is so heavyhanded it makes Warhammer 40,000 fiction look like Hello Kitty. I'm not joking, for the record, I have a complete set of the Gaunt's Ghosts and Ultramarines books. This is so utterly contrary to human nature, and so incredibly stupid to reward someone for. You don't want pyschopaths with guns for your soldiers, because then they're totally uncontrollable.
The Third Race plot pops up again. That's not new, sorry TopAce, but I have to admit the way you handled it was different.
Both times, the campaign doesn't really end. It just stops.